This is a corrections scenario. Write up this scenario as a report, and then click here to see how you did. (This is a Type 4 report: The officer initiates the action.)
At 8:15 a.m. on January 4, 2010, Officer Clint Walker #14256 was walking on the sidewalk in front of C Dorm. Walker saw inmate Charles Pandit R-23165 standing there while inmate Robert Sims R-11725 was going into the dorm. Pandit extended his leg to trip Sims. Sims didn’t see what Pandit did. Sims stumbled and dropped the soft drink he was carrying. Some of the liquid splashed on Pandit’s uniform.
Pandit turned to Sims, grabbed his left arm, and shouted, “You did that on purpose!”
Walker was standing about 5 yards behind Pandit and Sims. Walker told Pandit, “I saw what you did, and I’m going to write a disciplinary report.” Walker radioed for assistance. When Officer Aoki arrived at C Dorm, he and Walker escorted Pandit to disciplinary confinement.
On January 4th 2010, at approximately 8:15am, I, Officer Clint WALKER (#14256) was patrolling on the side walk in front of C dorm. At this time I saw inmate Charles PANDIT (R-23165) standing while inmate Robert SIMS (R-11725) was entering the dorm with a soft drink in his hands. PANDIT extended his leg to trip SIMS, causing SIMS to spill his drink as some splashed on PANDIT’s uniform. I radioed for assistance and the Action taken was a disciplinary report . Officer Aokie (#1234) arrived at C dorm and he and I escorted PANDIT to disciplinary confinement.
Report concl.
Good report! I would omit “at this time” to make your report more efficient.
Officer Clint Warner #14256 witnessed an incident on the C dorm between inmate Charles Pandit R-23165 and Robert Sims R-11725 in which officer Walker has assisted b officer Aoki to remedies to problems. On January 4, 2010, at 08:15 a.m on C Dorm, officer waler saw inmates Pandit extend his right leg to trip inmate Sims who stumbled, causing the drink he was carrying to splash over pandit.
Pandit got furious and in an attempt to cause an altercation, Officer Walker shouted to hi then radioed for assistance. Officer Aoki arrived on the scene and assisted Officer Walker in Pandit to disciplinary confinement.
You have a number of usage errors and opinions (which you don’t want in a report). Saying you “witnessed an incident” is a waste of time. Why else would you be writing a report? Wording like”furious” and “an attempt to cause an altercation” is vague and would not stand up in a hearing. I’ve posted a sample report for this incident, and other visitors to the blog have posted their own versions – some of them excellent. It would be a good idea to study them.
On January 4th 2010, at 8:15am, I, Officer Clint WALKER was patrolling in front of C dorm. Here I witnessed inmate Charles PANDIT standing while inmate Robert SIMS was entering the dorm with a soft drink in his hands. PANDIT extended his leg to trip SIMS, causing SIMS to spill his drink which splashed on PANDIT’s uniform. I called in to radio for assistance and a disciplinary report was written . Officer Aokie arrived at C dorm and he and I escorted PANDIT to confinement.
on January 4, 2010, at 8:15am, I was patrolling on the front sidewalk in C Dorm. I saw inmate Charles Pandit R-23165 extended his leg to strip inmate Robert Sims R-11725when he was entering the dorm. Sims didn’t see it and stumbled, causing he dropped his soft drink on hand and the liquid splashed on Pandit’s uniform.
Pandit then grabbed Sim’s left arm and shouted: “You did that on purpose.”
I was standing only five yards away behind them. I turned up for warning and told Pandit that I saw everything. Then I called assistance through my radio. Once Officer Aoki arrived, we escorted Pandit to disciplinary confinement.
January 4, 2010 at 8:15 am, Officer Clint Walker saw an incident between inmate Charles Pandit and inmate Robert Sims in front of C dorm. Pandit tripped Sims by foot which led him (Sims) to drop his soft drink and some splashed on Pandit. Pandit grabbed Sims arms and then Officer Walker intervened and escorted Pandit to disciplinary confinement.
On January 4th, 2010, I, Officer Clint Walker (#14256) was walking on the sidewalk in front of C-Dorm. I saw inmate Inmate Robert Sims #R-11725 enter C-Dorm with a soft drink in his hand. As he entered, Charles Pandit #R-23165 extended his leg and tripped Sims, resulting in his soft drink spilling onto Pandits shirt. Pandit then grabbed Sims arm. I radioed for assistance. When officer Aoki arrived at C-Dorm, I escorted Pandit to disciplinary confinement. Time of incident was approximately 0814 hrs. EOR
Use apostrophes in Pandit’s shirt and Sim’s arm. This sentence is confusing: As he entered, Charles Pandit #$-23165 extended his leg and tripped Sims, resulting in his soft drink spilling onto Pandit’s shirt. Whose leg? Whose soft drink? There are two males, so “his” could refer to either Pandit or Sims.
January 4, 2019 at 8:15 am, Officer Clint Walker saw an incident between inmate Charles Pandit’s #1234 and inmate Robert Sims in front of C dorm. Pandit’s #1234 tripped Sims by foot which led him Sims to drop his soft drink and some splashed on Pandit’s. Pandit’s grabbed Sims arms and then Officer Walker intervened and escorted Pandit’s to disciplinary confinement.
Approximately at 0815 an January 4 2010, I officer Clint walker saw innate Charles pandit r 23165 standing infront of c dorm, inmate robert sims r 11725 proceded to enter c dorm when pandit extended his leg to trop sims, resulting in sims stumbling and droping the soft drink he was carrying. Some of the liquid splashed onto the clothing of pandit. Pandit has grabbed the arm of sims and shouted “you did this on purpose” i radioed for assistance and when officee Aokie arrived we restrained pandit who has become combatant and escorted him to confinement.
This is how I would have written the report. Tell me what you think please
On January 4, 2010, at approximately 0815 hours, Officer Walker was standing on the sidewalk in front of C Dorm about 5 yards behind Inmate Pandit, Charles R-23165 when Officer Walker witnessed Inmate Pandit purposely extended his leg out to trip Inmate Sims, Robert R-11725. Inmate Pandit will be written a disciplinary report.
Write short, readable sentences. Use ordinary words – saw, not witnessed.. Don’t mind-read: you can’t know that inmate Pandit was planning to trip inmate Sims.
Here’s my version:
On January 4, 2010, at approximately 0815 hours, Officer Walker was standing on the sidewalk in front of C Dorm about 5 yards behind Inmate Pandit, Charles R-23165. Officer Walker saw Inmate Pandit extend his leg to trip Inmate Sims, Robert R-11725. Officer Walker escorted Inmate Pandit to confinement.
I’m also wondering why Officer Walker didn’t write this report himself. He saw the incident. And where is the name of the person who did write it?
Or are you perhaps one of the people who are afraid of the words “I” and “me”? You need to get over that. In the correctional system, you need to be prepared to testify about what you, yourself, saw, heard, and did.
I used to work in a correctional institution, and I testified at hearings. We all used “I” and “me.” It would have been absurd for me to say “Jean Reynolds saw Inmate Pandit trip Inmate Sims.”