Here’s a report based on the scenario you just read:
At approximately 3:15 a.m. on [today’s date] I was dispatched to the Gardenview Motel. I spoke to the night manager, Johnny Price, who told me he heard screams coming from Room 107. One of the motel guests also called the front desk to complain about loud voices coming from room 107. When Price went to check, he heard two women screaming. He went back to the front office and called police.
At 3:28 a.m. I walked toward room 107,and heard a woman’s voice inside the room scream, “That money is mine!” I knocked and identified myself as a police officer. I stood outside the door waiting until 3:34, when a woman (Lynda Graves DOB 3/12/78) opened the door. I heard a flushed toilet filling with water.
I went inside and saw two other women sitting in chairs near the desk in the room: Dee Slenska (DOB 8/11/80) and Carol Chakiris (DOB 2/5/80). All three women had bloodshot eyes and dilated pupils.
I saw Graves start walking towards the bathroom and told her to sit in a chair. I saw Chakiris running her hand across the top of the desk and told her to stop. I saw small amounts of white powder and used a tissue to wipe them up. I put the tissue into my handkerchief and placed it in my pocket. I went into the bathroom and saw a clear plastic bag floating in the toilet bowl. I retrieved it, wrapped it in my handkerchief, and put it in my pocket.
I called for a backup. When Officer Mason arrived, I searched Graves and found $522 in cash in her purse. I searched Slenska and did not find any suspicious items. Officer Mason searched Chakiris and did not find anything suspicious. I arrested the three women for possession of a controlled substance. I submitted the plastic bag and tissue to the Evidence Room.
In the second to the last paragraph.
It stated
” I put the tissue into your handkerchief and place it in my pocket. ”
I don’t understand is there another officer there and who?
You’re right – and I just fixed it. Thanks so much for pointing out the mistake!
At approximately 3:15 a.m., I, Officer Trey Williams, #724874, was dispatched to the Gardenview Motel. When I arrived on site, the hotel Manager, Johnny Price, stated that he had received complaints about loud voices coming from room #107. When Manager Price went to check what was going on for himself in room #107, he heard two women screaming. He then came back to his office and called the police.
At 3:28 a.m., I was walking towards room 107, when I heard a woman’s voice inside the room scream, “That money is mine!”I immediately knocked on the door and identified myself. It wasn’t until 3:34 a.m., when a woman (Lynda Graves DOB 3/12/78) opened the door. While the door was open, I heard a toilet flushing.
When I stepped inside the room, there were two other women, identified as Dee Slenska (DOB 8/11/80) and Carol Chakiris (DOB 2/5/80), sitting in chairs near the desk in the room. All three women had bloodshot eyes and dilated pupils. Lynda Graves then attempted to walk towards the bathroom, before I ordered her to sit in a chair. Carol Chakiris attempted to run her hand across the top of the desk before I asked her to stop as well. I then saw small amounts of white powder and used a tissue to wipe them up. I put the tissue into my handkerchief and place it in my pocket. When I went to investigate the bathroom, I noticed a clear plastic bag floating in the toilet bowl. After retrieving the plastic bag, I called for backup.
When Officer Mason arrived, I searched Lynda Graves and found $522 in cash in her purse. I did not find any evidence on Dee Sllenska. Officer Mason searched Carol Chakiris and did not find anything. All 3 women were arrested for possession of a controlled substance. I submitted the plastic bag and tissue to the Evidence Room.
“All 3 women were arrested” is passive voice – incorrect for a report. You didn’t say WHO arrested them. That omission could be a problem if there’s a court hearing or a problem with the arrest.
Hi Jean,
At approximately 3:15 a.m. on [today’s date] I was dispatched to the Gardenview Motel at 3:15 a.m
In your report you mention the time twice in first paragraph,l just want to know the the time we dispatched and the tim we arrived the same or not, if it’s not why we have to mention it twice.
Thanks in advance for your time,
M.k
Mahmoud, thank you for your sharp eyes! I deleted the repetition.
At approximately 12:42 this afternoon, I was driving to Cathy’s Café to get my lunch. I passed a wooding lot at the intersection of Post Street and Pine Avenue. At that time I saw smoke rising from the interior of the wooded area. I parked my cruiser on the side of the road, to investigate the area.
Less than a minute later I saw two male youths walk out from between the trees. When they saw my patrol car, they began running south on Pine Avenue.
I called the fire department, reported the fire, and gave the location. Then I followed the boys as they ran towards the E-Z Shoppe at the southwest corner of Pine Avenue and Carter Street. I pulled into the E-Z Shoppe lot. The boys saw me standing there and froze. Neither boys was carrying anything.
I questioned the boys, whose names are Jimmy Tonger (DOB 9/4/01, 1311 Conley Road). He told me he and Stone had a secret club that met in the wooded lot, and they didn’t start the fire. I then talked to Sam Stone (DOB 2/2/01, 1335 Conley Road). Stone said he and Tonger had a stash of “dirty magazines” that they kept in a cardboard box in the wooded lot. He said they smelled smoke, were afraid, and ran toward the street. He said he and Tonger were going home to report the fire.
I used my department phone to take a picture of Tonger and of Stone. I then called headquarters and spoke to Detective Camille Santos. I gave her the boys’ names and addresses for further investigation. I drove back to the wooded lot, parked my patrol car, and talked to firefighter Janice Wilkes, who told me the fire had already been extinguished.
I returned to the station house, downloaded and printed the pictures of Tonger and Stone, and gave them to Detective Santos.
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