On November 3, a Florida man was charged with a felony for allegedly throttling his mother. You can read the full story at this link: http://www.thesmokinggun.com/documents/florida/florida-florida-man-420695

Here’s some wording (in blue) from the complaint affidavit. Notice that the reporting is objective and concise. It records exactly what the officer heard and saw – and nothing else: no opinions, no unnecessary words.

Leatham’s mother said that her son was intoxicated and lying down on his bed. When she woke him for work, Leatham said, “I can’t do this anymore, I’m just going to kill you.” She said her son then grabbed a large television and threw it at her.

She said that her son “grabbed me around the neck” in a headlock and began to choke her, using the crease of the inside of his elbow. He then began applying pressure with both arms, using the free hand to grab his other forearm and squeeze.  She was able to make it to the doorway of the small camper and kick the door open, calling for neighbors to call 911.

The officer saw noticeable redness to her neck and throat area and several scratches around her neck and face. [I have a comment here: the word “noticeable” isn’t necessary. If you saw the redness, that means it was noticeable.]

But overall this is an excellent report.